From: James Shupe (Formerly Jamie Shupe) <jamie.shupe@yahoo.com>

Sent: Monday, August 12, 2019 2:25 PM

To: Fred Deutsch <Fred.Deutsch@sdlegislature.gov>

Subject: Re: South Dakota legislation (Returning Notes With My Thoughts On Suggested Changes)
Rep. Deutsch,
I've reviewed the documents and I see lots of problems in the language. I've included my notes about this in a text file because of hyperlinks. I didn't want a filter to snag this email.
My comments in a nutshell: I think a significant amount of the language should be stripped from this act. I provided an example of a similar Illinois bill with reduced language as an example.
As you know, I'm not a lawyer, but I've spent a lot of time reading about and studying this stuff, so my observations are based on that. And as a former Army leader, I'm trained to always
look for the loopholes troops will use against the folks who make the rules. The same thing applies here.
If you need more clarification on something I wrote, don't hesitate to reach out or call me if necessary and I'll elaborate further.
Respectfully submitted,

James Shupe

On Thursday, August 8, 2019, 02:02:54 AM EDT, Fred Deutsch <Fred.Deutsch@sdlegislature.gov> wrote:

Attached is a draft of the bill and white paper. I am grateful for your help. – Fred

PS Suggestions for modifications to the white paper are always welcome.